I adore this IF. From when I first saw the idea of your tumblr, I knew I would love it, plus I can now make my character have vision as blurry as mine.

I believe this is a spelling mistake, on turn 53.


Also holy moley this is so good?
Character descriptions are direct, the "are you sure" is hilarious, I am already incredibly hooked on the story. 

This was incredible. Speechless. 

AFDSFDAFDSA the writing and premise are so deliciously written omg this is genuinely one of the most beautiful IF stories i've ever read as a long-time fan of the genre 😭🙏🏼  the interactions with umr had me *giggling*--you really did a wonderful job of making such a detailed character with so many different layers of his personality. i found myself conflicted on whether or not i should hate or trust // submit to or defy him, and i found that inner struggle incredibly enjoyable! it was really as if he was a living, breathing person instead of just a written character, someone i am curious in figuring out in later chapters.

one thing i will say though, is that some choices didn't really convey the emotion i was expecting from the wording. i can't name any specific examples but i remember picking one or two dialogue options and being like 'oh, my character's smirking. it was supposed to be said sarcastically??' but maybe that's just me and it was such a little part of my experience and didn't detract from the quality of the writing in any way.

so, so excited for more of this project and to read your later works in the future! much love 😊💖

Great so far. Not sure how it's not mobile friendly, seems to work fine for me.

Your writing is stunning, both prose-wise and characterization-wise. The MC was such fun to get to know, and the interactions they can have with the Younger are so varied and vivid. I also love how you formatted the Journal by choosing to go for text descriptions instead of simple stat bars. That can't have been easy. Lastly, I don't normally like listening to audio while playing IFs, but I found the sounds chosen for this game to be quite agreeable with my finicky tastes. I often end up more distracted than immersed when IFs include audio, which is no fault of theirs — it's just how it is. But for some reason, this IF's audio immediately drew me into the ambience and world of the story, and it was a new experience that I enjoyed immensely. All in all, excellent work! The attention and detail put into each choice and route is outstanding. Even as someone whose MC has yet to choose a flirtatious choice and has only chosen a grand total of one (1) friendly choice, the tension, twists, and turns of MC's inner machinations and outer interactions with everyone and the world around them are more than enough to keep me wholly invested in my MC's journey and destination. Good luck with everything, and do give yourself a hefty pat on the back <3

Hello! The story is so captivating already! You have a very vibrant writing style. Almost poetic. I also noted the attention to detail in portraying the emotions of both the main character and the Younger. I already love the main character for being relatable and intriguing at the same time, and that's a great thing and a sign of a strong writing, I think. And thank you for the 'flaw' choice option.

That aside, I was amazed by the audio part of this story—the sounds perfectly accentuate what's happening, creating a perfect melancholic ambient for the story. And for a first attempt, in my opinion, you coded everything excellently. 

I encountered only one bug so far, in the 'but first, good morning!' choice, I think.


Good luck with the story!